Chapter 4Chapter 4- Nightmares or Reality?Chapter 4 by LittleBlackBird17
The forest was unlike anything I've ever seen before. It seemed to have a sparkle of mystery and enchantment all throughout its weaving trees and tangled vines. I began to walk but a voice stopped me dead in my tracks. I have never heard this voice before but it seemed so familiar. She sounded wise and full of authority.
"You must not go into the forest my dear." the words echoed softly.
"Who are you." I demanded, my voice slightly shaky.
"You will find out in time. But do not go into the forest. Ever."
"Only if you tell me why."
"You think your meant to save your world. But you are not. The psyche girl is lying. She just wants you brought to justice. You know your sister is the one not you ." The voice started to fade as another voice started. This voice was exactly the same but sounded exhausted.
"Don't listen to him, my moon." I heard and then saw a light and a women walk towards me. She was tall
Comments for Auditions - Set 2Comments for Auditions - Set 2 by RobinRone
Comments, listed alphabetically by entrant. Since this was the audition phases, comments are in an abbreviated format.
Jake Summers, Adin Winters, Aaron Spinner, Thom Winder by Fairiegirl101
AriadneArca: The question of the curse is a nice little hook, and Adin and Thom's personalities came across well.
GrimNecropolis: The characters play off each other interestingly, and the writer communicates the sense of a bigger picture.
Khan: This is an ambitious entry with four characters and a whole unique fantasy world.
RobinRone: The characters each have strengths, weaknesses, and behaviors that give them individuality.
TheBuggiest: I liked that there was friction between some of the characters, and some of them were fairly interesting.
AriadneArca: Jake and Aaron seem surplus at the moment. I'm not interested in them as I am the others, and I think the writer will find it very difficult to find the time to build each of her characters up as well